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Deviantart, silly, you aren't tumblr
5 Nights
...at Freddy's

I friggin scared myself when drawing and animating this...but now its not so bad...probably because of the lack of music

I hardly ever draw serious fanart, and when I do, it turns out to be stuff like this...

Add some bg music:
www.youtube.com/watch?v=qRC4Vk…
www.youtube.com/watch?v=l18A5B…
www.youtube.com/watch?v=RW8dIG…

stay sane
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I'm gonna get to the point...I'm extremely unhappy with what I have in Cinder Plight...so I'm gonna do something stupid.

Lets first address the problems:

PLOT HOLES:
In my attempt to integrate too many ideas into one continuous story line, I've forced things to make sense when they really don't. I don't want to reveal too much, but would you really roll with an underground facility meant to house people said to be witches for the purpose of research and human experimentation (not to mention illogical security and treatment)? You'd probably cock your head at that If it wasn't fleshed out and explained properly...which it isn't. Its not even important really, but I have it because its an important setting in the first iteration that I had of the story, which has a very different story and setting.

MAIN CHARACTER: 
At the moment, she's half baked with too many scattered parts. Scattered parts aren't necessarily bad, but she doesn't do much growing either to justify a sporadic beginning. Cinder plight has gone through three major writes and rewrites, the first was a dystopian futuristic story, the second is the magic one that I've been posting pages of, and the third is a floating city with airships and no plot which is why its not the version that exists. The first and third versions of Lynda are solid with a primary characteristic (pyromania and fear respectively) to act as a hub for all the other traits to make the character human, but she lacks that hub right now, and its a mess. I think this is less due to poor character creation than a poorly written character-plot relationship. The plot is just "happening" to her, and there are few choices actually made. I can attribute that back to the half baked character thing since she's missing a big chunk of something important: MOTIVATION. I have done nothing to develop her interests and goals in life.

AWKWARD SCENES:
This is actually less of a problem since I could just rewrite these...but they're still a problem...and they account for many many many more panels than necessary

GENERAL FORMAT:
Currently these pages are being spat out like...pages...as If I were making a print version of the book...which I'm not. At first, I talked about gluing these pages together to form strips...but why not just have strips and be done? I'm losing a lot of benefits with timing and stuff. I hope that these are faster than conforming panels into uniform boxes. It may become black and white depending on whether I can perfect a quicker coloring method without losing a lot of quality.

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SO OVERALL: I'm probably going to redo the thing...with lots of changes in the story
-Lyn might be older
-The entire beginning sequence is probably going to be different
-I'm thinking about releasing strips in a random order and have you piece them together, or at least start from right before the climax and work my way backwards

We'll still have the same characters and plot cycle, but enough differences to make sense

I may not go through with this depending on whether my changes screw up the story any further, but I've been thinking about this for a while. If the next page you see is from the existing version, then I'm keeping it like that. If not, then enjoy the ride
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9/12/14 - painting with a bg focus...

feel free to pop in, chat, and yell at me if I do anything besides draw, change the youtube song, or check my reference material
I'm gonna get to the point...I'm extremely unhappy with what I have in Cinder Plight...so I'm gonna do something stupid.

Lets first address the problems:

PLOT HOLES:
In my attempt to integrate too many ideas into one continuous story line, I've forced things to make sense when they really don't. I don't want to reveal too much, but would you really roll with an underground facility meant to house people said to be witches for the purpose of research and human experimentation (not to mention illogical security and treatment)? You'd probably cock your head at that If it wasn't fleshed out and explained properly...which it isn't. Its not even important really, but I have it because its an important setting in the first iteration that I had of the story, which has a very different story and setting.

MAIN CHARACTER: 
At the moment, she's half baked with too many scattered parts. Scattered parts aren't necessarily bad, but she doesn't do much growing either to justify a sporadic beginning. Cinder plight has gone through three major writes and rewrites, the first was a dystopian futuristic story, the second is the magic one that I've been posting pages of, and the third is a floating city with airships and no plot which is why its not the version that exists. The first and third versions of Lynda are solid with a primary characteristic (pyromania and fear respectively) to act as a hub for all the other traits to make the character human, but she lacks that hub right now, and its a mess. I think this is less due to poor character creation than a poorly written character-plot relationship. The plot is just "happening" to her, and there are few choices actually made. I can attribute that back to the half baked character thing since she's missing a big chunk of something important: MOTIVATION. I have done nothing to develop her interests and goals in life.

AWKWARD SCENES:
This is actually less of a problem since I could just rewrite these...but they're still a problem...and they account for many many many more panels than necessary

GENERAL FORMAT:
Currently these pages are being spat out like...pages...as If I were making a print version of the book...which I'm not. At first, I talked about gluing these pages together to form strips...but why not just have strips and be done? I'm losing a lot of benefits with timing and stuff. I hope that these are faster than conforming panels into uniform boxes. It may become black and white depending on whether I can perfect a quicker coloring method without losing a lot of quality.

---

SO OVERALL: I'm probably going to redo the thing...with lots of changes in the story
-Lyn might be older
-The entire beginning sequence is probably going to be different
-I'm thinking about releasing strips in a random order and have you piece them together, or at least start from right before the climax and work my way backwards

We'll still have the same characters and plot cycle, but enough differences to make sense

I may not go through with this depending on whether my changes screw up the story any further, but I've been thinking about this for a while. If the next page you see is from the existing version, then I'm keeping it like that. If not, then enjoy the ride

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I'm not much of an artist but I have many years of practice ahead of me. I forgot what I was going to write here. I spend most of my days procrastinating on the internet and thinking about snacks.
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otahunchan18 Featured By Owner 3 days ago
thank you for the llama! :iconyuiglompplz:
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TianMao Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem
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VactuART Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you for the Llama !
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TianMao Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem
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Emi-288 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  New member
Thank You very much for the llama! :)
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TianMao Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem
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untroubledheart Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks for the llama! :D
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TianMao Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem
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CandyDiamond17 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014  Student General Artist
thanks for the llama
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TianMao Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no problem
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